THE SKI DISASTER
Hi I am going to be sharing my writing. This story is not real, my school went to a ski trip and had fun and I didn't go so I made up a story so here my screencastify story. Hope you guys enjoy this post.
I really like this writing it took me at least 2 weeks to do this and I think I did good.
My next step should be paragraphing better and having more full stops and commas.
Kia ora Sameer.
ReplyDeleteThanks for sharing this and reading your Ski narrative to us here on your blog.
Can you identify some of the writing skills and features you have used and also let us know what your next learning step is?
Kia Ora Sameer.
ReplyDeleteI really like your part when you said you have to go to the thinking room because like real life not everything ends with a happy ending
Maybe next time you could try to show more vocabulary.
Hi, Boston
DeleteThanks for the advice, I will try to up my vocabulary.
Kia ora sameer I like your story because jordan fell over and I thought that that was funny and grate inmagennashan keep up the grate work.
ReplyDeleteKia ora sameer I like your story because jordan fell over and I thought that that was funny and grate inmagennashan keep up the grate work.
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